Smart Phone

Hooks:

Thumbs tapping, eyes widening, the man was glued to his smartphone, an extraordinary piece of technology he could not live without.

Leg stretching, arms moving, the kid, an average 13 year old, on the smartphone plays a game.

Hands lutching, feel moving, the girl plays on her smartphone, an extraordinary piece of technology.

Screen flashing, fingers scrolling, the man plays games on his smartphone.

Thumbs tapping, lips mumbling, a girl communicates with friends on her smartphone.

Final Draft: Introductory Paragraph *with hook and thesis

Hands clutching, thumbs tapping, I am glued to my smartphone, an extraordinary piece of technology I cannot live without because it allows me to interact and use the internet.

Topic Sentence #1: Interactions are a simple and fast way to communicate with friends and family.
Paragraph 1A: 
Interactions are yet a simple and fast way to communicate with friends and family.  You can call, text, email, and even use things like Facebook.  Playing games and listening to music is also a great way to hang out with friends. In addition, I must do this because I am lonely and I have no friends in order to not be lonely.  Interactions are a great way to connect with people around the world and make more friends.  The best part is that you can do it all in just seconds.

Paragraph 1B: 
Interactions are a simple and fast way to communicate with family and friends.  You can use interactions for fun, emergencies, and more.  Apps can also help you interact with family and friends, like Snapchat, Facebook, Instagram, Vine, Twitter, etc.  They allow you to share photos and videos with friends.  You would also have to talk to your family to catch up because you miss them or emergencies.  If you get kidnapped, robbed, etc. you can call a family member or 911.

Topic Sentence #2: Internet is the gateway to success, fun, education and relaxation.
Paragraph 2A: 
The internet is a gateway to success, education, fun, and relaxation.  Internet can make successful in education because if you need help with homework.  It helps you for example in when you don't get a problem you can look up tutorials how to solve the problem.  The internet can also help you in fun and relaxation when your stressed out you can watch videos, listen to music, and other ways to help you relax.  In all the internet is a great way to help you succeed in education and fun and relaxation.

Paragraph 2B: 
Internet is the gateway to success in education, fun and relax.  Using the internet we can research information about you want to get done.  For Example, The internet can help with homework, research and look up a definition or how to solve a math question.  Fun way is that you can play games.  One app is called Happy bird.